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Q: 병원에서 소지품 분실이 빈번하게 발생하는 것에 따른 해결책 제시

Hello this is ** calling… returning your call. I understand you have some problem problems ->앞에 some이 있기 때문에 in your hospital about the belongings.

Actually, I highly recommend to make a locker that you (should) set up a locker room in your hospital. It should be in the private room. And if you make have it, the visitor can use that with the keys or the numbers. It won’t charge you for any the extra cost for that. They can protect by themselves about their belongings. their belongings by themselves.

And also there will be the no issue about the belongings, so you can reduce the complaints and it will connected with your hospital image. and that way, you can build a better image for your hospital. 

So just think about that. And if you have further question, please feel free to contact me.

Thank you!

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